idle muse

groaning,swaying There should be a space between the , and the word 'swaying'. the stairs you enter I don't think 'entering stairs' really works. would never dare go. Too many ...

I really, really liked this. It's simplicity is also it's strength. was at the end of its spool 'Spool' seems to be like a desperate word to find something that ...

One of the most original pieces of writing that I have ever come across. An excellent delivery of a well thought out idea. Well done! I couldn't find anything to ...

I agree that there is overall a lack of emotion or true drama to the story. It seems fairly watered down, without truly exploring the subject matter. However, apart from ...

I really enjoyed that. Sometimes the dialogue felt a little bit forced, too stiff and formal, but overall it was good. You're grammar was excellent, as was your character development. ...

It is an interesting poem. However, telling us you 'don't care' what we have to say is very insulting. There a lot of very talented people in this site, most ...

Brilliant! Outstanding! Some other words that don't occur to me right this second! Poetically written, with excellent dialogue, description and character depth. This is one of my favorite pieces of ...

I am going to confess that the poem didn't really do anything for me. I didn't particularly understand it, and it didn't grip me at all. However, please don't take ...

Very well written! You're dialogue is wonderfully realistic. But for those of us who have never taken Spanish it can be a bit confusing, so I would recommend adding captions, ...

I am so sorry. That was an incredibly sad, poignant and thought-provoking piece of writing. I'm ashamed on behalf of my entire gender. On of the most moving things that ...

One of the best pieces of Harry Potter fanfiction I have ever had the pleasure of reading (and believe me, I have read a lot ). A stunning piece of ...

I agree with Sela. The concept of the story was very interesting. However, this reads like a really long blurb rather than an actual story. You should also have spaces ...

A bit too short for my taste, but it was well written. All your cares and worries Have left in a hurry. Every other line seems to be written in ...

I don't know if you meant for almost every paragraph to begin with 'I [verb]' but it feels slightly formulaic and repetitive. Your grammar seems excellent, but try using a ...

Well written. I didn't really feel like the story was going anywhere, but that is probably a personal thing rather than any fault on you part. Except for a few ...